Date: 2012-01-07 02:10 am (UTC)
Wow! That was absolutely amazing. You could drop this part right into canon and it was totally fit.

Staring at the mangled wand, Hermione‘s throat began to ache. Harry’s wand was gone, and it was her fault. Suddenly it was all just too much, and she lowered her head as tears slipped down her cheeks. She was alone, in the middle of nowhere with her best friend badly hurt, and there was no one to help her.

I loved the raw emotions this part provided. I felt you did a better job of delving into Hermione's feelings over shattering Harry's holly wand than JKR did. Excellent job!


She pulled the blankets up higher, until they were covered to their eyes, and wrapped her legs around his hips, bringing him flush against her from chin to groin. ... “I’m sure glad Ginny isn’t here to see this,” she muttered, trying to lighten her tone.

With all the angsting going on, you still managed to inject a tiny hint of humor. I could help but chuckle when I read this bit.

Excellent job! This was a thrill to read!
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